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« on: March 30, 2009, 05:41:57 PM » |
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Random haikus/other poetry/random writings.
Here is a set of haikus that go together to make a little story. Sorry that it sucks, I know that probably no one checks this stuff anyways.
"I planted a seed"
Digging in the soil.
Mud wedged in my finger nails.
The seed was planted.
Tending to the seed.
Water and sun sprinkled down.
A sapling peeked out.
The years crawled away.
Finally! Spring birthed a tree.
The fruit was rotten.
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Ruskin
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« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2009, 12:54:29 AM » |
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It could be much worse.
Not a bad first go at it.
Don't give up yet, Blake!
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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BlakeJustBlake
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« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2009, 02:01:00 AM » |
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The most important thing about haikus was something I read in Kerouac's Dharma Bums about how a good haiku uses a small amount of words to convey a vivid image to whoever is reading it. I tried to preserve that idea here.
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« Reply #3 on: March 31, 2009, 02:17:00 AM » |
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The idea is sound,
packing lots into little.
But that's verse for ya.
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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Paradox
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That guy with the Hypno Spiral.
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« Reply #4 on: March 31, 2009, 02:41:53 AM » |
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I'm no expert, but if I recall, Haikus are used to express brief, pure ideas rather than tell a story. That's why I would say your last Haiku is the best one; it shares an experience rather than trying to explain an action. Or, if I were to follow in Ruskin's footsteps...
A single moment
cut away both words and form
let beauty remain.
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« Reply #5 on: March 31, 2009, 02:43:17 AM » |
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Haha, faggy poem.
Play more Kingdom of Loathing
for haiku practice.
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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Paradox
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That guy with the Hypno Spiral.
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« Reply #6 on: March 31, 2009, 02:49:35 AM » |
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Is that game still unfinished? I might come back if they've added more.
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« Reply #7 on: March 31, 2009, 02:53:05 AM » |
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When I stopped playing,
the quest was finished, and yet
still, the game did grow.
Lots of things to do
and lots of jokes I am sure.
Still, I don't play now.
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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LTW
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« Reply #8 on: April 13, 2009, 01:09:07 AM » |
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If there is something strange in the neighborhood who you gonna call, Ghostbusters.  |
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"Well, it's a crazy fucked up world and we're all just floating along waiting for someone who can walk on water, man."
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« Reply #9 on: April 13, 2009, 01:14:02 AM » |
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that's not a haiku
and those aren't the lyrics
way to fail hard, man
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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I LURV QUACKERS
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« Reply #10 on: April 13, 2009, 01:24:28 AM » |
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Whatchoo talkin' 'bout?
The traditional haiku
Is 6-5-8 (not)
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« Reply #11 on: April 13, 2009, 01:36:42 AM » |
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Ha ha ha ha ha
you have made me laugh, bryan
i applaud you, sir
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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I LURV QUACKERS
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« Reply #12 on: April 13, 2009, 01:39:32 AM » |
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Huzzah and hooray!
Someone appreciates me
I feel popular
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« Reply #13 on: April 13, 2009, 02:01:48 AM » |
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don't get excited
you'll get a-head of yourself
or just a big head
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Hi, my name is Spencer Ruskin, and I'm a Post-Post-Post Squidiite. <TTS> I looked over on my floor and I thought I saw a pair of panties on the ground
<ruskin> um
<TTS> Turns out it was my dog's bandana |
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Panda.
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« Reply #14 on: April 13, 2009, 03:30:42 AM » |
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Haikus are easy,
but sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator.
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But all the clocks in the city
Began to whirr and chime:
'O let not Time deceive you,
You cannot conquer Time.'
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